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early lust then they love

Very beautifully and pragmatically stated
Love starts coz of early hormones
in guys mostly
some women let admission
oftenly
then they match up as
bf and gf
just for a long while to mingle
and
when entwined in love mostly
they deliver kids but naturally
and
if love still pursues
they marry
oftenly
and
finally as the autumn of life
has its way
leaves are shred
and
skin looks like an
aged oak tree’s bark
love must continue for miles
as does the fragrance of eucalyptus
we all are roses of the earth
let us merge and re-merge
again and again
then only we will know
all about

What is real love

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Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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follow our hormones, that our women are sluts "and some women let admission
oftenly" and what else is the the difference from any other nationality, except our skin gets old from the harsh Aussie sun?
And you have the temerity to write in the first person, you seem to have learned nothing of Aussies.

If there's anything true of Aussies you might have learned from Neopoet is that we make good poets because we don't waste words and we don't bullshit.

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

who thinks some are good, some are bad, some not so good.
That's fair.

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

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yet the sentiment remains. 'Down Under' is a term used to refer to Australia, a Western country in the Eastern part of the world, and I found it disagreeable that you would presume to write in the first person whilst referring to it.

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

kindly review all your comments
please

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I repeat my apology for the language I know you dislike, yet the harshness of my critiques, well, that's just my way and you know better than to take it personally.

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

only three poets read me here

Ian he holds my hands ....Even though not very soft
and
Stan he pulls me up once in a way.....but in a soft and smooth way
and you
I LOVE BEING KICKED
IT MAKES me run
like a Horse in Derby race.

joe esker and snow man
heaven knows where they have gone
and jane always disliked blood in my veins

judie- aussie liked my poetry
but now from neo abstains
god knows why
others like Shirley who swore by me
has gone away with her new found hubby
heaven knows who all still remember me
One day I too will flee!
silently..'as you say
no one will miss me.

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When I say you would be missed it is because I say it of my own accord and you know it to be true.
I might be a nasty bugger at times but you know me to be always genuine.

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

I had a brother like you
and I loved him too
thanks

if you agree i will unpublish this poetry
and repost it without any comments
silently all may again read

author comment

folk can click on 'Revisions' to see what the fuss was about.

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

cheers

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