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Senyru Life

Submitted by Barbara Writes on Thu, 2017-08-31 17:33

It's been a long road
Wrangling earth challenges
Time to spread my wings. (Barbara)

To wander in places new,
I will keep looking for you. (Ian)

Angels everywhere
Guard my path of consciousness
A more perfect earth (Barbara)

and in your light, I am me
let my heart and soul be free (Dooreen)

There in a moment
Entangled, yet both are free
You, you, and me, me. (Ian)

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Sparrow

Thu, 2017-08-31 19:39

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Just an additive to your Senyru, hope this keeps the flow into places only dreamed of, yours as always Ian..xx

It's been a long road
Wrangling earth challenges
Time to spread my wings. (Barbara)

To wander in places new,
I will keep looking for you. (Ian)

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Give critique to help keep Neopoet great.
Unconditional love to you all.
"Learn to love yourself first"
Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti

Barbara Writes

Fri, 2017-09-01 01:47

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Just what I would add to make it a Tanka
Unconditional love to you.

It's been a long road
Wrangling earth challenges
Time to spread my wings. (Barbara)

To wander in places new,
I will keep looking for you. (Ian)

Angels everywhere
Guard my path of consciousness
A more perfect earth (Barbara)

and in your light, I am me
let my heart and soul be free (Dooreen)

Im loving this

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Dooreen Cash

Fri, 2017-09-01 01:40

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and in your light, I am me
let my heart and soul be free

D.Cash

Barbara Writes

Fri, 2017-09-01 01:49

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You got the navigating down here

It's been a long road
Wrangling earth challenges
Time to spread my wings. (Barbara)

To wander in places new,
I will keep looking for you. (Ian)

Angels everywhere
Guard my path of consciousness
A more perfect earth (Barbara)

and in your light, I am me
let my heart and soul be free (Dooreen)

*Collaborative Poetry Workshop* American Version of Japanese Poetry ~ Renga ~ Haiku, Senyru, Tanka.

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Sparrow

Fri, 2017-09-01 03:57

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Maybe an addition am not sure..

There in a moment
Entangled, yet both are free
You, you, and me, me.

Yours as always Ian..xx

.
Give critique to help keep Neopoet great.
Unconditional love to you all.
"Learn to love yourself first"
Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti

Barbara Writes

Sat, 2017-09-02 10:41

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You got the navigating down here

It's been a long road
Wrangling earth challenges
Time to spread my wings. (Barbara)

To wander in places new,
I will keep looking for you. (Ian)

Angels everywhere
Guard my path of consciousness
A more perfect earth (Barbara)

and in your light, I am me
let my heart and soul be free (Dooreen)

There in a moment
Entangled, yet both are free
You, you, and me, me. (Ian)

*Collaborative Poetry Workshop* American Version of Japanese Poetry ~ Renga ~ Haiku, Senyru, Tanka.

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