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Breathless (senryu)

...drowning in deep love
breathless anticipation
suspended in hope.

Style / type: 
Structured: Eastern
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction): 
What did you think of my title?
How does this theme appeal to you?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Last few words: 
This is my first attempt at a senryu. I am hoping to enter competitions using this form and Sedoka.
Editing stage: 

Comments

Hi Mark
Pleases to meet you. Blown away with your comment. honoured you made it a favourite! I can see by your work you are a great writer I left a comment on your last piece! Brilliant!

D.Cash

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Nothing to critique here. I have a renga workshop you might like to join
Clink the link in my signature and check it out

*Collaborative Poetry Workshop* American Version of Japanese Poetry ~ Renga ~ Haiku, Senyru, Tanka.

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Thank you Barbara. I am on my way to renga! I am, however, writing for competition at the moment, looking for direction, on where to go for critique. Poem in first draft. It will be a Stanza. Can you help guide me to the correct workshop for this, or do I just post to stream?

D.Cash

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There are several workshops you can join and and get valuable critique. mines is one of several types and styles of poetry writing you can hone your skills with

*Collaborative Poetry Workshop* American Version of Japanese Poetry ~ Renga ~ Haiku, Senyru, Tanka.

Neopoet Community

Thank you for direction....on it!

D.Cash

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