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Comfort

Submitted by T. Harmonee on Tue, 2017-08-22 08:31

Warm blankets.
A charged tablet.
A cup of coffee.
When the weekend starts,
being in my bed.
Rested on a fluffed pillow.
Youtube loaded up
on the screen.
And a butter rum muffin.

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Free verse
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Eumolpus

Tue, 2017-08-22 10:40

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Something everyone can relate too. It is relaxing just to read. I can taste that muffin.
Very 2017. Keep this poem and look back at it in 20 years!

Eumolpus
I'd rather learn from one bird how to sing
than teach ten thousand stars how not to dance
ee cummings

T. Harmonee

Tue, 2017-08-22 11:31

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Yea, it will more pleasant looking back at the recent poems I have now in 10 or 20 years, than past work I wrote 10-15 years ago today. I can taste that muffin, I use to love it with coffee.

"Poetry is music for the human voice. Until you actually speak it or someone speaks it, it has not come into it's own."
- Maya Angelou

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Geezer

Tue, 2017-08-22 10:52

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the doctor ordered! A nice, relaxing morning pursuing the latest news, gossip and a leisurely breakfast! The title is self-explanatory and the theme is perfect for the weekend. ~ Gee.
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T. Harmonee

Tue, 2017-08-22 11:32

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Exactly. Ultimate weekend.

"Poetry is music for the human voice. Until you actually speak it or someone speaks it, it has not come into it's own."
- Maya Angelou

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scribbler

Tue, 2017-08-22 15:33

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comes in many forms and can even differ for a particular person from day to day. I like the way this almost reads like a list poem.....stan

T. Harmonee

Wed, 2017-08-23 07:45

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Comfort can definitely come in many ways. It's funny, writing this I thought "a single small object can give comfort in broad ways". Something someone else takes for granted, and there would be many ways you can write about. I guess that's the privilege poets have that the rest of the world is lacking, our ability is see the big pictures in miniature things. Gotta love it!

"Poetry is music for the human voice. Until you actually speak it or someone speaks it, it has not come into it's own."
- Maya Angelou

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