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Faster Than Light

We  want   FTL.

When  do  we   want  it?

Soon.

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We want FTL.
When do we want it?
Sooner.

We want FTL. When do we want it? Now.
WdeowwaenwtaFnTtLi.tW?hNeonw!

Yesterday.
We wanted FTL.
When did we want it?

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https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=JmpChd5D0d0
 

Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
*** I made a mistake with this. My assumption was that most people would associate FTL with Relativity and time distortions automatically and the repeated lines would draw attention to the structure and make a connection to the Doppler Effect. Any way I can fix it? ***
Editing stage: 

Comments

I didn't know what you meant
Until I saw your comments
I first thought
Fish Trout Live
Then fu*****ing Throw Love
Back.....
See if the fish frenzy over it all....

In Back to the Future?
Hmm..

This is a fun bit of incoherence as the future whizzes past us.

Reminds me of the march for Ganja joke that did the rounds in the UK:

"What do we want?"

"We can't remember.."

"When do we wannnn ittt!??"

"Ohhh...just drop it round some time man..."

(not to disparage those who partake - but my days of buckets are over ;) )

Funny first read for the night.

Thanks Jess.

Chris Hall - Tasmania

Grossbooted draymen rolled barrels dullthudding out of Prince's stores and bumped them up on the brewery float. On the brewery float bumped dullthudding barrels rolled by grossbooted draymen out of Prince's stores.

strangely clever

I will remember to laugh yesterday

Al

It's the first time I've used the Doppler Effect as a poetic device.
Came to me intact watching the Star Trek TNG episode "Yesterday’s Enterprise".

"incoherence", Chris? Did you not get what the enmeshed line said, and why it was enmeshed?

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

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The information paradox at the event horizon clicker switch thingy wasn't working last night...where's Chief O'Brien? Yeah I get it ;) Like Cummings on speed.

Chris Hall - Tasmania

Grossbooted draymen rolled barrels dullthudding out of Prince's stores and bumped them up on the brewery float. On the brewery float bumped dullthudding barrels rolled by grossbooted draymen out of Prince's stores.

one

is where past and future overlap, the rising sound of the approaching train becomes cacophonous noise and blur as it is passing and then the sound changes to a dying fall.

Literally it is the lines-
We want FTL. When
Do We want it? Now.
Overlapped, letter for letter.

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

author comment

I won't lie - I had to think hard.
But enjoyed
Jx

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cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

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You missed FTL - it was too quick for you
grin
Jxx

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but I remembered, and it was glorious.

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

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The rest of us would still be waiting at the bus stop.
Jxx

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Next stop Big Bang Viewing Platform followed by Milliways- The Restaurant at the End of the Universe followed by Time And Place Of Your Choice.

Passengers please be aware that transport is provided free of charge by mutual consent with 'The Tardis Heart of Gold But It'll All End In Tears' which is a sentient massively intelligent and somewhat eccentric AI mass transit ship so please be courteous, open-minded and quite prepared to go insane or die. No responsibility taken.

(a nod to The Doctor, Douglas Adams and Iain M. Banks)

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cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

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No on second thoughts don't want my brains completely frying.
I need the bit that still works.
Brilliant answer though.
Jx

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that did lead to different modes of thought but now... well now it's all weirdelf and Alex Machette's fault.

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

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the newest style of poetry! If you travel in the opposite direction, does the effect reverse itself?
Although I was an avid Star Trek fan, I never did get all the quantum-physic stuff straight. ~ Gee.
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There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

Anything approaching rises in pitch and lowers in pitch departing, regardless of direction.
Similarly things approaching look bluer and things departing look redder.

Ta, Gee

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

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moved

The 'garbled' line is where past and future overlap, the rising sound of the approaching train becomes cacophonous noise and blur as it is passing and then the sound changes to a dying fall.

Literally it is the lines-
We want FTL. When
Do We want it? Now.
Overlapped, letter for letter.

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

author comment

Ok I know it's one of these....but I don't which one. Several work with your poem. As usual a very unique post, from the mind of...wieldelf!

FTL For the Loss
FTL For the Lose
FTL French the Llama (Nerdfighters)
FTL Financial Transactions for Lawyers
FTL Flight Telecommunications Laboratory
FTL Financial Transaction Ledger
FTL Friends Turned Lovers
FTL Full Truck Load
FTL Fruit of the Loom
FTL Federal Tax Lien
FTL Field Team Leader
FTL Faster Than Light
FTL Feel the Love
FTL Flash Translation Layer (media format for linear flash memory)
FTL Follow The Leader (Korn album)
FTL For the Ladies
FTL Forget The Law (polite form)
FTL Fluorescent Tube Light
FTL Flying Tiger Line (airline; 1945-1989)
FTL Faster Than Light (Xenosaga game)
FTL Fluid Transfer Line (oil and gas industry)
FTL For the Lord
FTL Flight Time Limit
FTL Far Target Locator
FTL Free Talk Live
FTL Flip Top Lighter
FTL Far Too Loud
FTL Freedom to Learn (Michigan)

Eumolpus
I'd rather learn from one bird how to sing
than teach ten thousand stars how not to dance
ee cummings

'Last few words'.
faster than light (travel)

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

author comment

FTL? Warp speed? All to be here, now. :-)

yesterday...

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

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got it now.
(Also a trekkie. So little is mentioned about Deep Space 9, a Wagnerian spiritual story with a great depth..and a real story with a beginning and an end. )

Eumolpus
I'd rather learn from one bird how to sing
than teach ten thousand stars how not to dance
ee cummings

and whilst retaining its original depth the effects, design even acting style and script-writing are sadly dated.

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

author comment

My assumption was that most people would associate FTL with Relativity and time distortions automatically and the repeated lines would draw attention to the structure and make a connection to the Doppler Effect. Any way I can fix it?

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

author comment

written

though it would means the lines, with slight variations, got repeated an awful lot.
Remember the Doppler effect doesn't change perception it actually bunches up the sound or light waves in front and stretches them out behind. The original sound or light is unchanged.

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

author comment

published

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cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

author comment

moved

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cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

author comment

I made a mistake with this.

My assumption was that most people would associate FTL with Relativity and time distortions automatically and the repeated lines would draw attention to the structure and make a connection to the Doppler Effect. Any way I can fix it?
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=JmpChd5D0d0

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

author comment

by

Ta, Mark.

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

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I exist in the now, now look what you have done,
you approached and compressed my vision,
then in an instant you stood still,
I observed the strange awareness in your being, WTF
are we both doing on this page.
Then you sped away like shit off a shovel growing longer.
Was this another now ?
and where were you?
In which now did you exist.
The children told me that as there was no "Time", that's why they can be in more than one place at the same instant.
I have now lost sight of you, as there is just a smudge on the horizon, as if the Parallel lines met and became confused or just fused..
Take care young traveller, just whisper my name should you become lost, I shall hear you, and stand at your side,
Loves you Bru, Yours, Ian and the Children..

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Unconditional love to you all.
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Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti

Fucked if I know. As far as I know still sitting here twiddling my thumbs somewhere in the vicinity of Betelguse.

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

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Can't seem to see Jess anywhere, even the smudge has faded into a neutrality.
He will return and compress my thoughts again of that I am sure, lol.
This subject is so open, and there is scope for thousands of words.
We should rund a series on some themes just to read others values and experiences in maybe dimensions we can play with..
Take care and know I read as many words as possible.
Yours Ian..

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Give critique to help keep Neopoet great.
Unconditional love to you all.
"Learn to love yourself first"
Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti

Sitting right here, mate.

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

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Oh! there you are back in my now, thank whoever sent you back.
It is good to play sometimes and this gave me the best opportunity for a while.
I had to make a meaningless write into a topic, there are no answers to these philosophical thoughts.
Just a lot of words seldom with a positive direction, so we have talked and returned to a nothingness that pervades our now.
So I shall just enjoy all things as usual..
Loves You Bru..
Yours as always, Ian

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Give critique to help keep Neopoet great.
Unconditional love to you all.
"Learn to love yourself first"
Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti

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