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I'm all for the return of the old “God”
The one of the Old Testament
The one that demands an eye for an eye
Tooth for tooth

These terrorist-bastards
They think that they are going to
Sweet, innocent virgins in the after-life
I say; send them to it
By tenderizing their testicles
With hammers

That namby-bamby Jesus!
Turn the other cheek
I want to behead them
With a dull steak-knife

How to feel empathy for less than dirt?
Should I forgive and forget?
I want to feed their entrails to the dogs
Remove their teeth one by one
Shove pork down their throats

Let them live long enough
To regret the day they were born
I don't want them to breathe another breath
Without pain
Until they understand what they have done

That is no less than they deserve
No more than they would get
If I were the judge and executioner
If I had my way...
It would take a long time

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yeah, that turning the other cheek is hogwash! Smite those cowards till they learn their lesson. Show them some of the Old Testament stuff; none of that wimpy 72 virgin reward awaiting the miscreants for murdering innocent people. I'll join you in my own righteous wrath. Let's get two 5 pound sledge hammers to flatten their . . . . god this feels good. :)

it does! Thanks for the read and comment. ~ Geezer.

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Those animals deserve the same mercy which they show others.....none. Capture the or kill them. If captured interrogate them then shoot them. Then publicly cover them in pigs blood and feed them to hogs. And they have it wrong. No virgins await the,,,,VIRGINIANS are waiting for them and what they will get from Washington,Jefferson, Lee and their friends will be far different than what they expect. And these animals should be treated as Nazis. Tracked down and executed even into their old age.......stan

maybe make sure that they fall and hurt themselves? I mean, you know, have a few accidents while we are taking them into custody? I'm sure they won't give up without a fight. They have to be subdued you know. No lethal force, I wouldn't want people to think that we are barbarians; kill them without a fair trial and all. Thanks for the read and comments Stan. ~ Gee.

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