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Rain And The Woods

Submitted by The Rain Sprite on Mon, 2017-01-02 11:33

When it rains,
I imagine myself walking in the woods,
Drifting deeper while admiring
The fresh, green foilage
Of the trees.

I close my eyes
And enjoy the raindrops
As they fall around me.

I breathe in
The scent of the wet earth
And of the world that engulfs me.

I don't mind
Getting drenched.
I just want
To turn into mist
And envelop the woods.
I just want to fade
Without a trace
And come and go like
The rain.

Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
My pen name obviously tells so much about this poem. I wrote this on a rainy day while lost in my own thoughts.
Editing stage: 
Editing - polished draft

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Sparrow

Mon, 2017-01-02 19:09

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Have a look at one I put on stream a month or so ago called "A quiet time" it is a walk into the woods but this is not as good as it should be.
I have mentioned on your last one about sharp words, something like the Scent of something, the thing a Bloodhound follows, where as the perfumed blossoms aroused my thoughts of peace or even aromas can be thought provoking.
Your thoughts are great and the themes are good just a little change in the words , don't be afraid of using flowery language, this is what Poetry is for.
Paint a picture that will encompass my heart then hold it with a gentleness of a new born breath.
Take care,
Yours as always, Ian

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Keith Logan

Thu, 2017-04-20 10:31

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but a walk in the woods is ever a welcome break. I must admit to not being terribly conscious of the smell of the earth but the sweet odour of grass is always appreciated. Having said all that, I must admit to a great liking for this poem. Well done.

Keith Logan
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