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A Blank Canvas

Submitted by chevyvent on Thu, 2017-02-16 18:46

Take a painter out on a grassy knoll
Out with the easel & brush
Illumination
Hearts to unfold through the scene
A knowledge of sullen brevity
For he had treasured a red rose that was plucked a time before
A blank canvas then a brush stroke
The cue to summon his next move
Shadows taunt in long lines of division
Such as the pen with paper
An artist knows what there after
It's a special skill that takes some time
A heroic embrace across the Peyton Place
Reach deep as the unique colors will unfold
A soft touch at a glance such as a warm romance
A beacon of light to a much hurting world in need
True artistic expression & feeling
This source of truth comes from above
Left to touch as an angelic embrace across your heart
This will light the inner spark to what I'm waiting for
The masterpiece at last was finished
Embraced for all to see
A quaint canvas of expression brought about to those with eyes to see

Review Request (Intensity): 
Please use care (this is a sensitive subject for me, do not critique harshly)
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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Geezer

Thu, 2017-02-16 23:51

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a very rejected, dejected character and I understood it as such, but I felt hurried throughout the poem; like being fed too much at once. Take a more relaxed approach, make it shorter, longer but more... I hope I didn't discourage you. Take it as constructive criticism, because that is the way it was intended. I liked the idea of redemption and intrigued by your thoughts. ~ Geezer
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