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Stepping Out The Door

Submitted by Simon Smythe on Sun, 2014-11-23 20:06

cat biscuits
cat biscuits
must not forget
or the blighters
‘ill howl
till your mind
Is their pet

Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction): 
Is the internal logic consistent?
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

Comments

Esker

Mon, 2014-11-24 01:54

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the protest I call it..
little humans do it too..
tired..see them on the bus and in the shoppes
driving other people nuts

"Oh that squalling kid" etc..
not the kids fault...hungry..tired..etc..
bored....add..troubled..
spoiled..

but pets....they want..they need..and they no
the voice that just makes the point..
treats...food..trail trips
take me out..grunt gruff poke you with my
nose and that sad..happy hopeful look

until your mind
is their pet...

ha.
Relate well

Thank You!

weirdelf

Sat, 2016-12-24 15:29

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I just thought "yep, cats know who's boss, and let you know."

Esker's read does the piece more justice.

‘ill howl? Why the apostrophe?

cheers,
Jess
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