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untitled till you say

soon the lights
will dim
clouds will
veil the stars
what then will the sun
do in the morning
to tear
the curtain apart

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has to be one of your best. It certainly demonstrates how good brevity can be.
Possible title: Daystar

Keith Logan
the happy chappy
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one of the breviest bestest
thanks NEOpoet

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This depicts a transition of many things young Bard and well written.
We leave this plain to journey on after learning of physical things.
I always believe that there is a place where the children play and beyond, so we will see another sun where the skies are always as we think them to be and oh so many think things that are beyond our memories.
I fear not to walk without legs and see without eyes and feel without touch, come have a cup of tea with me I shall always be there in think,
Yours Ian..
PS:- I did comment and you missed it !!

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but you did not suggest a title
iron one

like AIR FORCE -1

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My opening words are This depicts a "Transition" and is the same as what Alid suggested, cant stop have to go to hospital for my Bionic eye Du Du Du..
Yours Ian..

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Give critique to help keep Neopoet great.
Unconditional love to you all.
"Learn to love yourself first"
Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti

that is really good ...

needs a fitting title, something
special.

who have helped me to come to this pass

wish you will help label it

if as u say it's class

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Pure poetry,

joe [Richard]

its a lovely day
seeing you
hope ur keeping
well too

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To me, this IS your BEST poem. Suggested title -Transition

Alid

thanks lets wait for some more
another posted as untitled

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is real poetry

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