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The Stealthy Poet...

Submitted by Geezer on Tue, 2016-08-16 00:01

The Stealthy Poet...

He's never had it quite this good
An audience at last!
See me, folks of my old hood
I've made the big time at last!

I pretend I'm crazy
Or maybe just not there
But I really ain't that lazy
I'm on my way somewhere

My paranoia is in full bloom
I think there's someone in my room
Maybe day-mares from them shrooms
I'm having thoughts of impending doom

Whew... I went a little amok!
I don't believe in all that truck
I think I was just a little stuck
Damn, this poem really sucks!

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Vivovon

Wed, 2016-08-17 14:36

Once I was told by a psychologist that I have to be half-mad to be a successful poet. Your poem successfully substantiated what I was told. A success. I envy you.

xxxxx

Geezer

Mon, 2016-08-22 23:14

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that it's true; that you have to be half-mad to be a poet! However, I want to be a great poet! So I am going for the whole deal! Really mad poet! There, I have declared my intentions. Thanks for the read and the comment. ~ Gee.

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judyanne

Sun, 2016-08-21 03:17

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Love it

Perhaps not sure of the title
'Stealthy' - doesn't quite say it to my mind....
Maybe
artful, crafty, delusive, foxy,
Or
privy, private, perplexed.... for alliteration
- my favourite though is impostrous

- the impostrous poet.....

A fun read gee
The meter is slightly out in spots - but it fits with the depicted erratic nature of the narrator, and I like it as it is

thanks for making me laugh
Love judy
xxx

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