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Who's Callin' Who Out
say what?
I can't hear you
lil' dude, I don't read lips
come on, spit it out mealy mouth
wanna start raggin' on me?, do ya, huh?
you're about to piss me off, boy
blurt it out, or I swear...
"SHUT THE FUCK UP"
say what?!!!
Comments
Rula
Sat, 2016-04-30 09:57
Hello Al
This is fun. I loved the spontaneous language of this one until the f*** word. Well! I think you know me. But I have really enjoyed the read.
Thank you for sharing.
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brittle light
Wed, 2016-05-11 04:15
Hi, Rula
thanks for checking this out.
I know I am late in responding, but sometimes I don't want a piece to keep popping up at the top of the list...so I wait till any other comments might show up so I can answer all at once...sometimes the wait is in vain! (LOL)
I know you are shy about some words...I'm not, but I don't believe in trigger warnings!
Al
mand
Wed, 2016-05-11 05:33
Hi Al
I think I'll show my grandson this! He's sixteen, I think he will relate very well to the rhetoric. This is an honest write - I actually feel like this sometimes. Lol so I can relate to it as well.
Thanks for sharing :)
Love Mand xxx
brittle light
Sat, 2016-05-14 05:23
Hi, Mand
thanks for responding. I don't typically write in strict forms (as most poets here don't)...but this form is pretty open ...just line lengths, like nonets. I got the idea to try one from reading Rula's version.
I'm glad you could relate somewhat.
I felt the same after finishing this as I did with a nonet I wrote long ago....I tried, it was fun, yay!
thanks again,
Al
jane210660
Sat, 2016-05-14 13:20
Love it and have to say
Love it and have to say (blushingly) it's written in language I do on occasion use :-) Jxx
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brittle light
Sat, 2016-05-14 15:04
from boyhood playground slang
from boyhood playground slang to the Kings English, and everything in between,
it's all useful to me.
thanks for responding, we all like compliments.
Al