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You are Here

I wrote songs for you
long
before we
met

their melodies
lingered
in the heart of me
echoing
through my everything
calling you
from Heaven

and
You came

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:))) love you too honey. This one came to me in the bath, fortunately it stuck around long enough to be written ;) so many poems run through my head and I'm unable to get them down (hands full with kids and nappies etc lol) but this one wanted to be remembered :) glad you like it :) and even glader it made you smile :) HUGS xxxx

'God turns you from one feeling to another
and teaches by means of opposites,
so that you will have two wings to fly,
not one.' (...Rumi)

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Thank you Shirl :) glad you like it. It makes my day to have made two lovely ladys smile :) much love Beki xxx

'God turns you from one feeling to another
and teaches by means of opposites,
so that you will have two wings to fly,
not one.' (...Rumi)

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Sweet!

Nice to see you Beki.

I have a thought for tweaking the ending which is the heart of the poem.

You are here. The title already suggests the ending.

Anyhow, welcome back and I look forward to reading your poems.

~A

Hi Anna, apologies for not responding sooner, very rude of me to post and run lol :) I quite like your suggestion but wonder if maybe I could alter the title and not the end? would still address that issue, hey ho, I'll give it some thought. Lovely to see you here :) oodles of love xxx

'God turns you from one feeling to another
and teaches by means of opposites,
so that you will have two wings to fly,
not one.' (...Rumi)

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Very nice! Glad I read this one.

Victor

"When a pickpocket meets a holy man all he sees are his pockets."

Unknown (at least to me)

Ta Victor :) glad you're glad :) and you enjoyed the poem, much love Beki xxx

'God turns you from one feeling to another
and teaches by means of opposites,
so that you will have two wings to fly,
not one.' (...Rumi)

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Thank you Lonnie :) I guess that's what all us poets aspire to eh? so happy you found some inspiration here, much love Beki xxx

'God turns you from one feeling to another
and teaches by means of opposites,
so that you will have two wings to fly,
not one.' (...Rumi)

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hi again , good to see you about
a nice sweet write, good title ,,zigs

I salute anyone who breaks the rules in the interest of art and great poetry writing just as much as I admire poets who craft meter and verse within the confines of good grammar. Walk the tight rope or jump from it and see if you can fly.

Hey Zigs, good to see you too, would love to be around a bit more but time and life will not allow, at the moment anyway :) glad you approve of title, I changed it after seeing Anna's comment, much love Beki xxx

'God turns you from one feeling to another
and teaches by means of opposites,
so that you will have two wings to fly,
not one.' (...Rumi)

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Welcome back . and the tweak you thought of works, beautifully.

~A

:) the tweak I thought of?! ;) lol glad it worked as the title, I really didn't want to change the last line :) but could totally see what you meant in your comment, thanks Anna xxx

'God turns you from one feeling to another
and teaches by means of opposites,
so that you will have two wings to fly,
not one.' (...Rumi)

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nope, I was bassackwards. ;-)

~A

I always enjoy a poem of such simplicity and deep feeling. Very nice..........................scribbler

Greetings back :) happy you felt it scribbler, much love Beki xxx

'God turns you from one feeling to another
and teaches by means of opposites,
so that you will have two wings to fly,
not one.' (...Rumi)

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You have a natural talent. I agree with all the above. Short but packed with lovely emotions.

Well done

Love Mand xxxxxxx

Thank you Mand :) glad you enjoyed it, much love Beki xxx

'God turns you from one feeling to another
and teaches by means of opposites,
so that you will have two wings to fly,
not one.' (...Rumi)

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