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Empathize

The Mind of An Empath

There's so much pain,
So much sadness,
I don't know how to not notice it.
My life revolves around it.
Your hurt is my anguish,
Your hate is my anger,
Everything you put out
I am forced to pick up.
Feel what you feel.
Can you imagine?!
Feeling everything all at once,
Every day,
Your entire life...
I can't ask you to not feel.
What would that make me?
So I feel what you feel.
I hurt when you hurt.
I take it all.
Is that not hurting me?
You'd like if I would sucks it up,
But that isn't a choice.
Empathy is how I understand the world,
But no one understands me.
I am alone in it.
Feeling the emotional world!
Surrounded by it,
Consumed,
Gobbled up whole,
Not a piece left.
Would you put your pain aside to help?
Would you believe that I understood you,
Maybe better than you do?
I'm not in my body
I'm in yours,
And hers,
And his,
And theirs,
All the time.
Neverending emotions that aren't my own.
Couldn't tell you how I feel.
No, not anymore.
Maybe in few words:
Stressed,
Beaten down,
Ripped apart,
Cast to the unforgiving winds.
I put my soul in a bottle
Long ago.
Threw it to the waves
Maybe it will come back...
Maybe it will find a place to be free,
But no one is gonna take my soul away.
It's already gone
Lost,
Dead.
Given to God because I have no use for it.
All I can feel is what you feel.
My emotions died with my heart.
So my last sliver of humanity,
Was sealed up tight,
And cast far, far away.
Maybe it's better this way...
I am supposed to understand the world?
Where would I fit into it?
I will be the outcast.
I will be the sacrifice.
I will let go of my feelings.
No more am I myself.
Call me Legion
For we are many...

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Comments

Outburst of emotions, feelings and sentiments so vividly scripted in this poem with lots of unique expressions, such as

I put my soul in a bottle
Empathy is how I understand the world,
But no one understands me.

The poem also shows how you feel the emotions of others too...The title therefore is perfect..

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raj (sublime_ocean)

raj you are so sweet to read my poetry I never have time to sit online and read thank you

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raj you are so sweet to read my poetry I never have time to sit online and read thank you

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Legion.

Alid

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