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The Road

Submitted by Shamoneness on Tue, 2016-02-02 17:51

The road is a grey
misty fog
an enigmatic stream
leading us to ambiguity
Beauty awaits around
corners of mindsets
set in tranquil reachings
tangling stairs
going up or
down dependencies
on windowlit sight
to cocoon and become
to wallow in idle
stagnance
Better to walk a misty road
that ends in light
than to run through a bright
road that ends in death

Style / type: 
Free verse
Editing stage: 
Editing - polished draft

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Geezer

Wed, 2016-02-03 09:55

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sure about what this implies, but see some promise here. I think you might try to make it a little clearer what this is about. ~ Geezer

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Eduardo Cruz

Wed, 2016-02-03 14:21

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"The road less taken" everyone goes after glimmer, but in the end it burns out like a candle.
The road less taken is not always well paved. but there's always less obstacles to contend with.
I live my life that way, I do not believe in the domestication of the world. I live for the now!
These are my favorite lines, because it tell of the heart of the poem;

"Better to walk a misty road
that ends in light
than to run through a bright
road that ends in death"

Really like this a lot you go girl!
Eddie C.

LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE

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