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Singing the ennui away.

Trundle up the hill in grief,
then thunder down,hot tears in rain

Wedge your nose into a rose,
as if to learn to sniff again

Find your feet, raise up and plod
on the self same, old beaten track

Peer in lost curiosity at shops, once known,
interiors now, are starkly black

Realize, you've done all this before
and wonder also, too

Why all the horror of the world
has been lost on some, but loosed on you

But know: this is just the ennui talking
that late afternoon palliative rose

That covets all our shouldered burdens
convinces us we're carved morose

When will all this vicious circling,
totem of the life we call absurd

Be broken and the heart thrown open -
hearing songs, as yet unheard?

Style / type: 
Structured: Western
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I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Last few words: 
France, notre cœur est avec vous.
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Loose, but obvious structure. Almost a western structured free verse.
I liked it very much.

W. H. Snow

A poet is a nightingale, who sits in darkness and sings to cheer its own solitude with sweet sounds. Percy Bysshe Shelley

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Ever since the Guardian (UK) misprinted "can't" with hilarious, if unfortunate consequences, I read that paper very carefully.

Take care.

Chris.

Chris Hall - Tasmania

Grossbooted draymen rolled barrels dullthudding out of Prince's stores and bumped them up on the brewery float. On the brewery float bumped dullthudding barrels rolled by grossbooted draymen out of Prince's stores.

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I suspect you are already aware that line 7 needs a bit of trimming. Maybe :peer through shop glazes once familiar? Enjoyed the read nonetheless........stan

Well spotted, was just testing you ;) - line is thus tweaked, and another minor change. busy time of the year, haven't been around much, hope all is well.

Cheers.

Chris.

Chris Hall - Tasmania

Grossbooted draymen rolled barrels dullthudding out of Prince's stores and bumped them up on the brewery float. On the brewery float bumped dullthudding barrels rolled by grossbooted draymen out of Prince's stores.

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