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Alethea's Fairies (1980)
Alethea told me that she saw them
the fairies playing in the oak
but she didn't tell her mother
for she'd think it was a joke
But I believed her story
for I remember as a child
the hours spent up in my tree
and the memories I compiled
All the magic things that happened
as I swayed there in the breeze
and that feeling of euphoria
I had when I climbed trees
Sometimes the magpies joined me
just to warble in the shade
and I'm sure I understood them
as I hid there in the glade
Oh how I loved that Moreton Bay
and the memories won't fade
even though she died so long ago
in my heart her beauty stayed
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Rula
Tue, 2015-10-06 02:16
Hello Joan
and a warm welcome to Neopoet.
This is absolutely a piece I wished I have written. Bringing childhood memories and expressing them this well is the hardest for me till this moment, though they are many and all are happy.
I think you've interpreted them so well. I feel a little envied. :)
I have nothing to suggest for improvement at the moment.
Thank you!!
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Joan Rolls
Tue, 2015-10-06 04:02
Thanks Rula im glad you liked
Thanks Rula im glad you liked it. My niece triggered those memories for me with her story about the fairies in the oak tree at my mums house.
joan
raj
Tue, 2015-10-06 14:26
Like Rula has said...it's is
Like Rula has said...it's is a nice reminisce about childhood and convey how well you connnect and communicate with nature...i specially liked the verses
All the magic things that happened
as I swayed there in the breeze
they provide an energy to the whole poem is what i thought..
Regards,
raj (sublime_ocean)
Joan Rolls
Tue, 2015-10-06 16:44
Thanks raj
Thanks raj