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If you knew

If you owned my heart,
Would you give me happiness?
If you loved me, let me know the truth
But
If you just like me, then keep me away
I may fall in love with you

Would you know me, kiss me?
Salute me and carry me to your horizon
Desire me and make me your feminine half
Let me be your queen, your majesty and consort
Imprison, and then release me
Torture me and cure me

Take me to where my world will meet yours
But please
Don’t free me too far from you

All I wanted from you is too simple
I want to get lost
Between the lines of your hands
The only question in my mind is...
Can we do that without any fear or being sinners?
Otherwise let it be our great sin is falling in love
In this world love...
Did not, doesn’t, and will not be a sin at any century.

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Excellent flow, full of emotion and feeling

Thank you for sharing

Love Mand xxxxxxxx

Thank you to you too for thos comment.

Mona Rose

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A strong piece, sweet, tender and yet honest. You have the gift. JohnXxx

My friend John
This is the first time I can see your comment without any suggestions,and that is means I DID IT""Smile"":))
Thank you
you are always near by giving advice as you as Theo and Jess.

Mona Rose

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Dear Rosi
Im too much happy to seeya again
Thanks

Mona Rose

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You beautifly capture the desperation of love, that almost feels like love in that measure should be a sin, but it's not. it's just the insanity of it, blinding to see nothing else.
I love this write!!
Always Eddie

LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE

To be honest with you, I wrote something describes my feelings and referred to the environment around me indirectly.

Thanks Eddie

Mona Rose

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love, that wonderful dangerous balance we're fortunate to ever find at all.

"When a pickpocket meets a holy man all he sees are his pockets."

Unknown (at least to me)

love, that wonderful dangerous balance we're fortunate to ever find at all.
And I say: yes"":))

Dear Victor
thanks for your comment

Mona Rose

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Arabian Nights
Love alone attracts like
Bees to honey
Lovely Arabian nights
Forgotten
In the nectar of desperation
You know

Alas love did flow
From top to toe

A fool only shall leave ye
In the wilderness of time
Where can one find
A sweet lover
Of thy singular kind

loved

It is early morning hear"6:am" just dropped in to see the comments and I saw yours.

Dear Loved and my friend too.
Where have you been all this time?.

You know
your poem drew a big smile on my face. Thanks
It is a great start for new day.

Thank you for your lovely comment

Mona Rose

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Spoken Words

You steal words
From my mouth
I was to ask of you
As you haven't read
Nor commented
Any of mine
Whither in the vast ocean of time
Did you stray?
Into the darker
Canyons and crevices
I felt utterly betrayed.

Now that you have come
Do stay
I can't let you again
Go away this way
Albeit tis late
Sunset of my life
But a friend
I can still be
If there is no strife

loved

sorry,
maybe I did that before you say any Lol.
I will be there and leave very honest comments, but don't be sad if I was too much honest.

thanks again

Mona Rose

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by the stance
of mysterious hands
so i pray
i shall stay
and hear your version
some other day
Arabian nights
don't forget
that will be
my last regret

loved

Okkkkkkkkk

Mona Rose

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Thank you so much my friend

Mona Rose

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I love this poem....you have touched the sublime. You begin the poem with an extraordinary and simple question, and end it with a simple and extraordinary answer.

~A

Dearest Anna and my friend, and I'm happy that you love it.
Thanks

Mona Rose

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a very reflective write ..very expressive and effective....

warmly..

raj (sublime_ocean)

All from the heart

Thank you.

Mona Rose

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Yes Mona..the deep seated emotions in your heart are palpable in the write...

Merry Christmas to you and your beloveds...

raj (sublime_ocean)

I do share my colleagues at work their religions celebrations, coz they are Christians and catholic and vice versa.
It is too nice to meet different people from different countries with different believes and cultures.

Mona Rose

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I agree that to love can never be a sin, but at times to act on love can be wrong ( as in love for another's mate ) very powerful write and only suggestion I'd make is in lines 16 and 17. I think both should be either want or wanted....................scribbler

I agree that to love can never be a sin, but at times to act on love can be wrong ( as in love for another's mate ) very powerful write and only suggestion I'd make is in lines 16 and 17. I think both should be either want or wanted....................scribbler

Yes, I'm totally agree with you. Love should not be a sin or the reason of any sin.

Dear S.
Thanak you very much for the suggestion and comment.

Mona Rose

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I was so wrapped up in the yearning displayed in this poem I forgot to make 2 suggestions lol :
line-3 change loved to love to maintain tense
line-16 change wanted to want for same reason
of course if the mixing of tenses is intentional, ignore these.........................scribbler

Thank you very much Stan.

I will see what I can do, and your suggestions always welcomed on my page.
I'm still trainee in poetry.:)))))

luvXxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx

Mona Rose

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Watching this poem and that, and offering suggestions here and there at this website .I really love that, and you.

Mona Rose

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This is so beautiful my friend, it makes me believe in love

You can never pick anyone up if you are busy putting them down

Thanks for your lovely comment.

Mona Rose

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Thanks lan
I'm happy to see you here:)))))))))))))

Mona Rose

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Thanks my friend.
I will try to keep myself on the same level.

luvXxxxxxxxxxxxx

Mona Rose

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