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Persist

I reside in the cold hours of dawn
My pain of existence intensifies
Crystal clear clarity pierces right through me

This hate I feel for myself
Freezes in my veins
Hot tears stain my barren cheeks
And scar my imperfect soul

They say you have to love yourself before others can
But self-loathing is already a part of me
My hostility and sorrow make me who I am

So should I just wallow in the egotistical train of thought
and persist in my hurting?

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loving yourself for who you are is the answer which you have done here. you are comfortable in the hurting, it is about you no one else. there is love in that, because you don't lie to yourself you recognize what you feel so you live it. when you get tired of it then and only then can you move on. no one can tell you when, that's the beauty of choice. Which is only yours.
I love the the reality of this write and the fact that the darkness is not darkness to you but a place to look into your own psychic.
wonderful, great!!
thanks for posting this beauty
E.C.

LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE

Thanks everyone, maybe I should join Depressives not so Anonymous,( a little black Humour for ya ) lol

Seriously thank you.

hope you are ok xena

Love lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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Thanks, i'm well known for my typos

love lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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Thank you Ian.

There ia always someone worse off, who usually handles it better than you.

lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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remember kurt cobain's comment
'thanks for the tragedy, it helps my art' (or something like that)
love and hugs
judy

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

Do you realise Kurt Cobain would be about 43 now,which is the same age as me?, I don't claim to have his talent though.

love lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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I love the honesty of your poems.

Excellent poem my friend.

Love Mand xxxx

thank you

lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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Lou,

without doubt the best poem you've written to date. Perfectly self-loathing and the edit has tightened it up too.

Can't pick out any favourite lines - they all weave neatly into each other and flow wonderfully well.

Excellent poem!

HS

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With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth, yet nobody sees me.

HS,

Thank you I'm so pleased you liked it.

Lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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