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a happy blue moon today

Submitted by lovedly on Fri, 2015-07-31 13:30

BLUE MOON TODAY
It is 31 July today
a blue moon all say
lovely twill be tonight
Ah what a lovelingly sight
a lover’s delight
comes once every three years
so don't miss a chance
all my near and my dears.

a very beautiful share
love is all essence
we must share
and
love all with earnest care
be kind and graceful
to respect the one
when due
and
love will forever return to you
and
this alone is true
those who stab are minuscule few
and
are found out by all too
so just ensure
you all love me too
I can't all woo
but shall love
all of you
this promise you..

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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Sparrow

Fri, 2015-07-31 18:15

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I have been outside and that moon is not Blue,
It's that old muddy brownie, yellow colour.
If it is made of cheese then it could be Blue.
Some people like that blue stuff yuk..
Good write, may I say just a little attention to flow and needs a little tidy, lol
Take care Young Bard and know we are thinking of you, Yours Ian, And the children..

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Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti

lovedly

Fri, 2015-07-31 18:57

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twill never be blue!!!!!
despite
'tis a moon coming
after two and a half years
thirteenth full moon
and new crescent one
this month in 2015

next wait till 2018
when you will be sweet 76
inspite
till then compose poetry without respite
ok spite!
just be happy
as only you read me
butter is cheaper
when applied verbally!!!
and of course
it spreads naturally

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