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Inspired by Keats (June Contest)

Submitted by wesley snow on Fri, 2015-06-05 17:52

When I am frightened all shall end
before my epic poem is through,
ere I have chance to shape and mend
the tales I want to tell to you;
When I can view the storyline
unwritten in my teeming brain
and know that I shall soon resign
from life and all has been in vain;
And when I fear, you poets of such peerless grace
shall never know my chronicle,
then all my wonder I erase
and ponder the ironical.

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Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction): 
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Last few words: 
This is based on Keat's masterwork "When I have fears..."
Editing stage: 
Editing - polished draft
Contest: 
Writing Like A Master

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Sparrow

Fri, 2015-06-05 18:17

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No matter if it is Keats or another like poet, you have excelled in this write.
It being simple yet loaded with everything felt for a position in life,
Yours, Ian

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judyanne

Thu, 2015-06-18 23:11

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Just heading of to delete my entry :)
Great take Wesley
love judy
XXX

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

Rula

Fri, 2015-10-23 14:52

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a master piece sir!!
No wonder!!

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