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as you glide by
when you glide
high up in the sky
the trees will sigh
and many will shed a tear
may be
but the only difference shall be
I will be looking still Lovedly--------------------------
take care the journey may be lonely
pass by gradually
and wave candidly
all neopoets will stand
as in a standing ovation
as they decide the noble Nobel
for thee ..
but
never mind I also have given up my rights
for something beyond me
I feel its time to realise
we are not the only one who stand by
in a hope of the eventual prize
tis my surmise
the Nobel is a lost PRIZE....
so I abandon my right
to fight!
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Comments
Sparrow
Wed, 2015-05-13 18:30
Loved
Sometimes I wish you would comment on my pieces as I follow your progress through the days.
This is a piece where you are starting to think of the way your words come across to others instead of just going at a tangent to thoughts.
Just a little tidy have a read carefully and just do a self correct..
Try not to use a comment that you have used for another's work it is damn lazy. (e.g. Joes piece)
This piece would have stood on its own merits
Your writing of late is what we have been waiting to see so just a little more thought,
and the title I give thee will be.
Yours Ian.T
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Unconditional love to you all.
"Learn to love yourself first"
Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti
lovedly
Thu, 2015-05-14 02:23
shall
as I am a bit busy in some more important works than poetry
Sparrow
Thu, 2015-05-14 03:14
Loved
Hope you can rest with us as soon as.
What is keeping you busy 24/7 ????
Not to worry as the world is full of things to do.
I shall wait for your time off times.
You take care and I hope that you are doing good for the world,
Yours Ian
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Give critique to help keep Neopoet great.
Unconditional love to you all.
"Learn to love yourself first"
Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti