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You

i'm lost and swimming
in the things
i never got to do
with you
give me one more minute
to say hello to you
i'm stuck in a stagnant tide
in all that was
and never was
sinking in a dream
where i say those words
to you
give me one more second
to say goodbye to you

Style / type: 
Free verse
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I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
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Comments

Always remember that you are as good as the next person and if someone wants to belittle you it is a fault in their makeup not you.
We are all beautiful souls and can be hurt by others that cannot see us properly, it is their fault.
A mirror to look into each day and say I love you is the best thing then spread that love around to those like souls , you will then reap the universal love and that is infinite.
Loved your write and use Capital I when writing you are important, Yours, Ian..

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Unconditional love to you all.
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Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti

Thank you so much : ) That means a lot

author comment

i liked this for the way it expresses the feelings and emotions.

Regards,

raj (sublime_ocean)

Thank you!

author comment

really love this piece. Ian has given you a good advice. here's another if you will have it. no matter what other's view on you, you know yourself better, so don't let their negativity brings you down. You can use them to check on yourself or you can ignore them and walk away. In the end, you are the one who define yourself, not them.

Alid

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