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THE ROLLING CREST
Now...
where I sit and recall
the times passed
music, loved ones....all
But
it's also where I dream
of things yet to come
plans and hopes
the future
So here I am
in a never ending tension
being pulled forward and back
Ever riding the crest of Now's wave
as it rolls across
the ocean of time
And as years goes their ceaseless way
they change
just like me
as I surf onward in
the now.
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words:
Realized it had been a while since posting a free verse. And I'm not fond of using a line within a poem for title, so I'm open to suggestions
Editing stage:
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Comments
weirdelf
Mon, 2015-03-30 10:24
Nothing wrong with using a line within for a title,
beats the shit out of untitled.
Some suggestion-
Wave of Now
A Present
The Present.
Fine freeform, I liked it. If you don't use 'present' in the title I would change one of the 'now's to present, one too many repetitions in my view.
cheers,
Jess
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scribbler
Mon, 2015-03-30 12:47
Hi Jess
i reckon you know I'm a bit different from a lot of people about my writing lol. Thanks for both your time and title ideas. Hmmmm.........somebody should host a shop about titles lmao. I'll gather a few more suggestions then make a title decision. I'll ale see about there being too many "nows".......stan
author commentraj
Mon, 2015-03-30 14:40
Stan
How about
At the cross roads
No Man's Land
Timed Out
Stop Watch
Static
raj (sublime_ocean)
scribbler
Mon, 2015-03-30 15:29
raj
All good suggestions. Even if I don't use one of them or even any others suggested these ideas will at the minimum give me different avenues of thought to explore......stan
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