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Narcotic Rhythm
Narcotic rhythm
pounding beat,
hypnotize and set me free.
When that sound hits,
I lose myself,
I let go.
Chorus
Turn up the heat,
make me high.
Body sways, releasing me.
Chorus
Stomp and shout.
A drug free buzz,
body moves, relieving me.
Bass rips through my chest,
I become more like myself,
with every depression of the keys.
Crazy darkness,
wraps me in it’s web,
and i'm gone.
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Comments
lou
Fri, 2011-01-14 07:20
Shirl
Ive been writing lyrics for a while, remember the chat I hosted?
I like the title , so I will keep that.
Thank you
Love Lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
raj
Wed, 2011-01-12 14:08
Dear Lou...
in this write you have scripted so very well how the beats & rhythm temper our moods ..feelings and emotions...atleast that's what i perceived after reading your write...i enjoyed it..
warmly...
raj (sublime_ocean)
lou
Wed, 2011-01-12 14:49
Raj
thank you
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
raj
Wed, 2011-01-12 16:02
Lou
was my perception right?
warmly..
raj (sublime_ocean)
lou
Wed, 2011-01-12 16:30
Raj
you are correct.
lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
lou
Wed, 2011-01-12 21:44
Shirl
Hate to admit it but when I looked at the original title, it sounded like something a police man would do. Lol
But don't gloat, lmao.
Love Lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
lou
Fri, 2011-01-14 07:14
JC
As you know i started writing lyrics a little while before i hosted the lyric chat afternoon. it frees you up.
lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!