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BLIND, DEAF OR DUMB which you prefer

Submitted by lovedly on Mon, 2015-02-02 16:54

hearing !

well in my time twas

HIS MASTERS CHOICE

Who is the master I asked
none would tell me

I didn't bother
as i could hear
from London to Paris

now I ask the next door guy
what did i say

so to stay deaf
now I pray
why bray
as we all here are gay
sorry gray!
now have
Your say.....
Iam deaf anyway

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

Comments

alidzain

Wed, 2015-02-11 04:21

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if the title is a question, my answer is none. lol.
last line "Iam" should be "I am" or I'm".

Alid

mand

Wed, 2015-02-11 04:32

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I know I wouldn't like to be blind! but I have a feeling that it's what I will get in my old age! - though none are a happy prospect :)

Nice one Loved

Love Mand xxxx

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