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hear I come again!
HERE I COME AGAIN
hear I come again!
you compose it
on my behalf
and
I will stamp it fast
I only know you do read
and
only you remain agreed
that my poetry does breed
but alas as Jess says
legs up in the air
come and read me,
if you can't come in
at least cum....
he does mean
and
now he is our poetry chef,
I can't or dare not take liberties
ere he mixes chillies
and
rum in my wine
and cuisine
but so be it
I shall compose
as I always do
a poem as per norms
even if tis to be read
by you a single man
you are my guardian!
composed as for Ian now spearho!
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage:
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Comments
Sparrow
Wed, 2015-01-21 19:00
Loved behave yourself
This could be a grand theme to write of, many poets suffer depression and other things in their searching for that perfect work or cry for help.
We know from some of the pieces you have written that you can write up there with the best of the poets.
You can cry false tears and shout out for help, better for you to whisper grand words to portray your moods..
The title needs an edit "Here" is the correct word, and then again in the second line, still I bet you know this and it is deliberate to attract attention, you have my Ear here,
Take care young Bard and sort this one out a little.
Yours, Ian
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Unconditional love to you all.
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Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti
lovedly
Wed, 2015-01-21 22:05
thanks Ian
I ain't in kindergarten
i know what is
here there and
ear that can't hear
so glad you caught my hear
as in here
tell all others too
to read me here
lovedly
Wed, 2015-01-21 22:09
and this was composed months ago on ur commment khalid
the poet helped me pick it
so hear
okay
here tis
weirdelf
Wed, 2015-01-21 22:13
I agree with Ian
Loved, I love you, hate you, you sometimes write the 'gems' I often refer to but this begging for attention lacks dignity.
For fucks sake don't do it. It is demeaning and worthless poetry.
You have the talent, use it.
cheers,
Jess
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lovedly
Wed, 2015-01-21 23:38
jess no more hankering...u know..
this was history written months ago
Alidzain brought it up
now i damn care
under ur umbrella
i the
rain and sun share
as for me you do still care
all are now aware