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spiritually soulful

Spiritually soulful

that alone makes your boat steer
the life of a river
you call soul

But I fear
as the river goes
towards the estuary
it lingers within me

when will the waters flow?
ere
I also go
but yet life is too slow
the turns and twists of the river
tell me so

Friend stay some more
who will then know?
from where to where
your river did flow
so still I say
go slow

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Free verse
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As the river so life
We start as a spring
Gather speed as we fledge
Cruise through the middle ages
Leave all behind on the shore
As we reach for our home
The ocean.
When I wrote the Great Bears stories he talked of this journey, did you not read it??
A great write from one of your comments!
I shall post it though it is a little long for you..
Yours Ian..

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Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti

if you abridge it to 20 /25 lines
special relaxation sparroan Ian
as against 15/20

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good one.love this.'nuff said.

Alid

loved you have been chasing !

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