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A LEGEND IS BEING BURIED NOW 10 DEC 2014

A LEGEND IS BEING BURIED NOW 10 DEC 2014

Oh LORD!

Oh! Lord if thou does’t exist,
pray grant me a final wish
that ere they bury me or incinerate,
in the cloudy rain and snow
the sun weeping silently
behind darkened clouds...

''''just a small wish...''''

give me life for just a wee moment,
to be able to rise and thank
all standing in ovation,
to praise me hence...

O God a small favour
I ask of thee,
give me all roses from all gardens
in heaven and mother earth,
if you so wish,
so that I can make a garland

for all who shed tears,

like rains to water the earth,
as they pray...
more seeds afresh arise
from mother planet earth,
a minuscule part of your universe.

O God prove to this ailing humanity,
that you exist
and have no vanity,
it’s all sanity
that you grant
as my remains they replant,
into your realms of eternity,
where am I just a dust of a legend,
in the gamut of your existing Royalty

O God, take me within thy folds,
then soonest,
as I have thanked most,
who bravest the cold
as I take their leave

Oh God for me
don’t even you grieve,
I believe you exist
that’s why for such a favour
I persist.

Oh Lord yes you exist!

O Lord I believe you will...
Wipe off the tear from my eye
wherein in state still I lay
and your kingdoms on earth come,
it surely may....

Amen!
Ameen
Inshah Allah
Hey Ram
Hare Krishna
Wahe Guru
Khuda Hafiz
God Bless!

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Comments

Surprisingly i have to say, as i don't normally like these praise/thank god things... they usually seem overboard fanatical

But if you had to write one, i can appreciate the thoughts

I think it would read much better if you dropped all the oh gods and oh lords, except for the first one

Love judy
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

I shall
I did not know him at all
but someone praised him
so i composed one
suitable for him
and one and all
thanks for your kind call!

author comment

Love your use of language and the intensity of this one - it really feels like a plea from the heart!

I'd listen to you if I were God!

Well done! :)

nicely penned

Love Mand xxxxx

I salute you for this!

author comment

Best yet! me thinks xxxx

you thinks best

author comment

Go d write, excuse the typo,
This was well composed and well written, it wont be great for all, but if they can think then they will reply no matter what drives them.
Being of a spiritual nature, as long as you do good to all in this life no matter what entity you follow you will enhance your Spirit for later, that to us is why you are here.
Take care young Bard I look forward to another season so that we can watch new things grow.
Yours, Ian,

.
There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

thanks in a hurry will get back soonly

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