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roses

smell the roses on the way
a saying often used
to encourage awareness of the day

amiable, perfumed petals
the aroma of harmony
the joys of living
captured within....
the bloom forever true

unfailing redolent bouquet
steadfastly soothing
... one can forget
lurking out of sight
there are prickles

and some seasons
the barb jags the finger

for each chance we take
a lesson is learned
while both flower and thorn
share the telling

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I would not have thought it possible to bring a fresh sense to a poem about roses, well done.

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

I was unsure of this .... my muses are still sulking .... so I'm really happy you think that i achieved at least one aim of the poet.....
love judy
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

author comment

Good job of conveying that smelling the roses can often come with a price. Stanza 3 line 2 might read a bit better if started with either "an" or "the". I enjoyed reading this......stan

For your input on this.... it made me rethink it and i think it's better..... do you ? Would love to know
I don't use .....s that much, but i think they have their place

I didn't want too many and's or the's.... and i had a win ... because you made me think, i got rid of a that :)

Love judy
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

author comment

FYI ... are called ellipses

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

Yes i know that jess
Was just being silly and facetious
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

author comment

many hues of roses
in present society
what a piety

yours spread fragrance

Thanks for the visit and comment
Love judy
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

author comment

is that all

after such a long time
spent in the wilderness
i have stopped composing
as only Ian reads me
and i stop dead
at two only

now i spend hours leisurely
at a new site
lovely tis

each moment is a bliss
they all send flying kiss
gals and guys doesn't matter
its all coz
i am loved and lovedly
there some one
wantedly
neopoets be happy
you produced a one like me

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