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How The Wolf Got His Fill (humour in poetry - exercise 1)

Rapunzel tried on the glass slipper
brought her by Baby Roo,
monitored closely by Badger,
whilst the Wind in the Willows blew.

The Emperor had on his new clothes,
ready to marry the one the shoe fit,
unaware that, from head to toes,
he was as bare as a closely shaved armpit.

But she cared not a wit, gave a squeak
of excitement - held in his thrall;
she was quite taken by his physique -
not an ugly duckling at all.

Aurora was waving her apple,
attempting to change his mind,
but the Emperor's eyes were on Rapunzel's ankle.
To everything else he was blind.

The clock struck twelve, the ball began.
Three bears supplied the porridge -
warm and simmering in the pan,
but to eat it was going to take courage.

Hansel and Gretel stole the bread
while the rest of the guests all ate.
(It really was a wonderful spread -
the Emperor was no cheapskate).

Glinda, the good witch, by whisky emboldened
(and all those that noticed turned pink)
sent off, to the groom, a strong frost spell of cold, and
his 'physique' then started to shrink

And, looking closer at her beau,
Rapunzel changed her mind.
She let down her plait though the window,
leaving the papers unsigned

and the glass slipper on the table.
(Which was pounced on by all and sundry,
to see whose foot might be able.
They all tried it on with glee).

Then, through the window via the maiden's hair,
the wolf, escaping the huntsman,
gave each guest a terrible scare
as he ate every one, just for fun.

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Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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A need for the workshop name to be part of the heading xx
A grand mix, of many of our lovely stories, I have noticed that as we write these we still keep to the violence that runs through them lol.
Great to see you here and we have missed your word wise writes,
Yours Ian.

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

For the very kind comments
and, yes.... seems we can't get away from the violence.... i guess that's because it was ingrained into the original tales (that weren't really meant for kids, but were a hidden commentary on social and political conditions)
Love judy
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

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I did have the workshop exercise as my title
Anyway - I've given it a title of its own now...
love judy
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

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Another ringer you guys are doing great

Chrys
Let your mercy spill on all these burning hearts in hell(Leonard Cohen)

It was fun
Looking forward to the next exercise
Love judy
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

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This was fun. The cast of characters mix well together and create quite the story.

Keep Writing,
Carrie

"Quoth said the Raven, NEVERMORE"

I enjoyed doing this
Love judy
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

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the moment i open my mouth
all laugh at me
is it not enough humour????
in my poetry
may i ask thee...

what more do you want from me
simply laugh it off
and/or/but
tell me

Please quit seeking recognition for your works without giving a decent review of the page you are supposed to be critiquing

I love you very much, but it is not appropriate to be doing this
Love judy
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

author comment

where you signed up for the workshop
that doesn't matter if you care to participate you are more than welcome

but please follow the criteria with appropriate wrtes to the workshop

Chrys
Let your mercy spill on all these burning hearts in hell(Leonard Cohen)

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raj (sublime_ocean)

I was not aware that participants in this workshop would need to write humorous poetry with a Fairy Tale Theme, else I would not have participated. Apologies for late withdrawal.Honestly I am absolutely poor in Fairy Tales leave alone knowing about fairy tale characters.

I will keep reading the submissions which would be a learning experience. Never too late to learn.

Regards,

raj (sublime_ocean)

I am sure that Chrys would not mind if you used some other discourse for your write
I think her idea is more to show the humour when stories get mixed up
Perhaps you could use 3 different novels - lol, i think that i would rather enjoy a mishmash of something like Dickens, Bronte and Shakespeare, for example

Please reconsider pulling out - i wouldn't imagine the whole workshop will centre around fairy tales...
Love judy
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

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Please have a look at this web page it contains many of our fairy tales and I am sure you can make up a short poem containing something from a couple of them:-
http://www.fairytales.biz/list.html
The stories are from some of our classic writers, such as Lewis Carol and many others.
These stories and rhymes are the bedrock of bedtime stories for the children, not the ones I talk of though.
Go well young man and we will talk later,
Yours as always Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

Thanks for providing the link, which I will use to understand more about fairy tales. I am not sure if it would inspire me to write something closely resembling fairy tale or using their characters. We all are different with different likes. It would therefore be like having a piece of fabric one is not thrilled about and then getting it tailored into a garment. You know what i mean?..Just like fairy tales I am not someone who likes science fiction. So, even if i have to make an effort to write a fairy tale kind of poem i shall be dragging my feet.

Regards,

raj (sublime_ocean)

I think that some of the fairy stories that were told to the children have some hidden meanings and me as a child became fascinated with the stories, they furnished a base for an imagination that could walk on any ground in thought.
These go way back to when we didn't have books and the stories were handed down through generations.
Some of the stories have become films such as Snow White and Cinderella with quite a few others, a lot of them have been made into Pantomimes,
that are performed around the big cities theatres.
Good luck with your write and don't shy away from them, maybe you have some of your own culture or country that will give us some work to do,
Yours as always Ian.

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

Judy anne has a very good suggestion
are there any cartoon characters that you might like
I'm looking for the humor in confusion
I'd hate to see you drop out
hang in and perhaps just by pass this exercise and wait for the next

Chrys
Let your mercy spill on all these burning hearts in hell(Leonard Cohen)

I have given raj the www site for many fairy stories, this is a great place to find a couple of stories to mix up, I shall have another look tomorrow there are many I have never read so its a Gold mine of knowledge, http://www.fairytales.biz/list.html
Night Night for now, Yours Ian, xx

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

love this.'nuff said. Wish I could write like this.

Alid

For you visit and very kind comment
Love judy
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

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Good humor and a veritable host of fairy tale characters. I keep going back to stanza two, line 2 and think maybe changing "one" to "foot" might add a bit more humor by hinting at a fetish, but it's pretty funny as is......stan

I like your idea lol
Love judy
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

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Ha ha - I like your humour I smiled and laughed - not only is it funny but it is also well written and the story line is great! Nice one! :)

Love Mand xxxxx

still smiling :)

For the visit and kind comment
Love judy
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

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is where he eats everyone. Of all the characterizations that was the most "fairy tale" like. Cruel, vicious and while we laugh and giggle with the children.

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I never though of it like that. We do laugh when the wolf eats everyone, must be the vicious side of us that comes out. My Wolf tends to be a bit dark and cynical.

Keep Writing,
Carrie

"Quoth said the Raven, NEVERMORE"

Yes - the violence is an integral part of nursery rhymes and fairy tales, so i wanted to keep it in my write
Love judy
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

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I have access to the site only via my phone or tablet, as my computer won't let me go there - keeps complaining about the security certificate....

anyway, my point - i cant copy and paste my poems from the computer - i have to write them out in full

My point you are asking?
Lol - i missed a whole stanza out of my poem.... i've just popped it in now
Explains why Rapunzel changed her mind - i rather thought it important :)

Love judy
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

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Fun humor Judy.

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Your look at my edit is very much appreciated
Love judy
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

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