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Tide

the cosmos
microscopic and colossal
performs a dance of spheres

within it -
the cyclic journey between
Temporal
and Now -

a mobius strip
filled with
countless consorts

I watch, with ease
the Tide
lap my feet

the currents tug
to where the stories go

Style / type: 
Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Comments

yes, let it be with ease..no pushing allowed...let it go where it might...why fight the force of destiny, or fate, or the arbitrary.

this is how I read your poem.. .a metaphysics I can relate to.
Even if I got it wrong, I don't care. It made its own sense to me ...and I like it.

sincerely,

Al

I am very glad that you could relate to this, and i really appreciate your supportive comments
Love judy
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

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Like Al has commented, you have captured the metaphysical elements very cleverly. I would add that you have given it a master stroke with your creative prowess in the concluding two lines ...

Regards,

raj (sublime_ocean)

For your kind and supportive comments re this write
Love judy
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

author comment

I agree with Raj - You are a deep thinker and clever word smith. Love the way you think and express yourself. :)

Love Mand xxxxx

for the visit and very kind comment
love judy
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

author comment

I definitely enjoyed this read, and was fascinated by the power it possesses! You have a sure winner here, young lady!

Glad you related to this
Love judy
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

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A beautiful contraction of the universe, where it ends up lapping your feet, then hold the journey, where the stories are you may flow.
Yours, Ian x

.
There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

Your read and comment greatly appreciated
Love judy
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

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having become a gran ma of a boy
you have forgotten

the poetic child in me

once you nursed my poetry Judy
not only in poetry
ur more scientific than me

I have not forgotten you, but i have only just returned
Give me time eh?
meanwhile, do you have anything to say about my write?
Love judy
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

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