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The morning After a November Storm

Submitted by Edevold on Fri, 2010-11-26 12:58

The snow is here now
everything is so much brighter
but the cold is fierce

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Edevold

Sat, 2010-11-27 10:31

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I just thought I'd type out a short three verse - (they were discussing 5-7-5 patterning on a post) - and this kinda turned up after choosing the title "Snow" but I've changed the title....... Thanks, MArk

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weirdelf

Fri, 2015-01-02 01:45

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it works for me

cheers,
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Esker

Mon, 2015-01-05 02:30

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descripts spot on....'fierce'
indeed it is..

Thank you!

mand

Mon, 2015-01-05 03:11

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I absolutely love this Haiku - the imagery is iconic of the next day after a winter storm - white and pristine! but it comes with a deep bitter cold.

I'm not sure if it really matters but the second line has eight syllables. ( I think ). It depends on how strict you want to be. ( I think there is a decree of flexibility allowed - though I'm not sure ).

Any way - well done to you this is a beautiful haiku.

Love Mand xxxxx

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