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I Want You To Know
Before being sandwiched
in every day's mundane chores,
those frivolous issues, and some more,
I come to read you,
I smile.
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raj
Sun, 2014-12-21 13:21
Rula
Good one but needs more..push the accelerator and continue to drive...you know what i mean?
Regards,
raj (sublime_ocean)
Rula
Sun, 2014-12-21 14:08
Raj
I know what you mean, you might be right, but sometimes it comes to you like this. Just a thought and you like it as is , no more no less. May be I should have posted it rather as a blog. But I appreciate your thoughts and the visit.
Thank you.
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emogothgirl
Sun, 2014-12-21 14:37
well
i think it's perfect. it made ME smile :) nice little write.
mag
Rula
Mon, 2014-12-22 10:03
if I could draw a smile
On someone's face every morning, then my mission is accomplished :)
Thank you for your visit and the comment.
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wesley snow
Wed, 2014-12-24 17:36
If I asked you to change it,
would you?
W. H. Snow
A poet is a nightingale, who sits in darkness and sings to cheer its own solitude with sweet sounds. Percy Bysshe Shelley
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Rula
Wed, 2014-12-31 07:46
Sir
Would never like to go against whatever suggested for improvement, especially when it comes from my dear mentor, but I don't have anything to add to this little piece.
It is how it is intended. If I have got your question right sir.
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weirdelf
Wed, 2014-12-24 17:58
I love brevity, captured moments
like this and Al's recent 'Small Stories'.
I did not understand the line
I come to read you,
could you clarify?
cheers,
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Rula
Wed, 2014-12-31 07:18
jess
Thank you. I am happy you like it.
I think Mand's comment said it all
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mand
Thu, 2014-12-25 10:27
Hi Rula
I'd go with Jess on this one. :). + it's a nice gesture to someone special!
Love to you
Mand xxxx
Rula
Wed, 2014-12-31 07:16
Mand
I think you got me there. :)
Thank you dear for your clever comment. (((Winks)))
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lovedly
Thu, 2014-12-25 10:29
and that's a white lie
its been ages
at me
since you smiled
Rula
Wed, 2014-12-31 07:13
Loved
You can never guess.
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Esker
Sun, 2015-01-04 04:08
gracious gestures
are not lost
fortuitous tidings
spelled to an ear of
the soul
bring blossoms
than you!
Rula
Sun, 2015-01-18 00:40
Thank you Steve
Not sure how I missed your comment
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