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Tide
the cosmos
microscopic and colossal
performs a dance of spheres
within it -
the cyclic journey between
Temporal
and Now -
a mobius strip
filled with
countless consorts
I watch, with ease
the Tide
lap my feet
the currents tug
to where the stories go
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Comments
brittle light
Mon, 2014-12-15 20:35
yes, let it be with ease..no
yes, let it be with ease..no pushing allowed...let it go where it might...why fight the force of destiny, or fate, or the arbitrary.
this is how I read your poem.. .a metaphysics I can relate to.
Even if I got it wrong, I don't care. It made its own sense to me ...and I like it.
sincerely,
Al
judyanne
Wed, 2015-01-07 20:53
thanks so much Al
I am very glad that you could relate to this, and i really appreciate your supportive comments
Love judy
xxx
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)
raj
Tue, 2014-12-16 12:39
Hi Judyanne
Like Al has commented, you have captured the metaphysical elements very cleverly. I would add that you have given it a master stroke with your creative prowess in the concluding two lines ...
Regards,
raj (sublime_ocean)
judyanne
Wed, 2015-01-07 20:54
thaks raj
For your kind and supportive comments re this write
Love judy
xxx
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)
mand
Thu, 2015-01-08 03:50
Hi Judyanne
I agree with Raj - You are a deep thinker and clever word smith. Love the way you think and express yourself. :)
Love Mand xxxxx
judyanne
Fri, 2015-01-09 06:48
thanks mand
for the visit and very kind comment
love judy
xxx
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)
Lonnie
Thu, 2015-01-08 18:47
Judyanne
I definitely enjoyed this read, and was fascinated by the power it possesses! You have a sure winner here, young lady!
judyanne
Fri, 2015-01-09 06:49
thank you Lonnie
Glad you related to this
Love judy
xxx
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)
Ian.T
Fri, 2015-01-09 11:54
Judy
A beautiful contraction of the universe, where it ends up lapping your feet, then hold the journey, where the stories are you may flow.
Yours, Ian x
.
There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
judyanne
Sat, 2015-01-10 10:24
thanks ian
Your read and comment greatly appreciated
Love judy
xxx
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)
lovedly
Sat, 2015-01-10 10:33
in ur own joy
having become a gran ma of a boy
you have forgotten
the poetic child in me
once you nursed my poetry Judy
not only in poetry
ur more scientific than me
judyanne
Sat, 2015-01-10 13:20
loved
I have not forgotten you, but i have only just returned
Give me time eh?
meanwhile, do you have anything to say about my write?
Love judy
xxx
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)