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night vision not blindness
Darkness is not dark enough
You claim to have served in the Air Force
I presume you would have served
in darkness
and don't you recall,
after some time
one overcomes night blindness
and
one can see in to the dark sea,
as one can during broad day light
otherwise how do you say
owls see clearly at night,
they have no special night vision
the darker the night,
the clearer one sees
as you walk into your bathroom
you switch on no lights,
ere you become blind
once again for a while
so go back ole veteran
and recall
there is something known as
night vision after all
so don’t make any stories so tall.
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Free verse
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Comments
weirdelf
Mon, 2014-12-08 01:25
powerful and rich
Loved, when you nail it, you really nail it.
cheers,
Jess
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lovedly
Mon, 2014-12-08 09:27
Thank Jess missed you
Thank Jess missed you
Hope ur better and well
get well soon w/o u
what will neo do?
Ian.T
Tue, 2014-12-09 11:20
Loved
I have been in places so dark that I fell over myself.
White outs or dark without visual aids (Not the sickness) there is a loss of being it is used sometimes as a brainwashing device.
Night Glasses are made to enhance what little light there is.
But when there is complete absence of light there is nothing you can do about it.
We had all sorts of detectors on the helicopters, you see some of them on the police chases.
But true absence of light is something different.
Good write though young Bard, just leave this old guy out of it lol.
Yours, Ian
.
There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
lovedly
Tue, 2014-12-09 13:06
f999999999999999
ian
lovedly
Tue, 2014-12-09 10:32
sure friend
u r Ian
well experienced
u forgot to add
'ung bard!