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What

I stared at the darkness
It enveloped my thoughts
To hell with this,
came to my mind
I switched the light on
Now I am delighted
Which seems to be
a contradiction??

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Will finish this tomorrows morning, Night all, mind you I wrote one the other day with what seems to be invisible ink.
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conduits of conduction
atoms and neurons
of watt
and wyes
of ways....

Just going mad for a minute or two, lol
Thanks for your visit,
Yours, Ian

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have you sealed your brush
to clean the unread ones
lying in doldrums

not done not done not done
you alone are neopoets
prodigal son
the UNDISCOVERED ONES
THEE SUMMON
GO BE a
good Samaritan

I am having a break and the undiscovered will have to stay as such until some other than us two decide to reply to comments or make their own comments.
It seems that there are a few that service the many instead of the other way round.
When poems of mine stay there more than a few days I unpublish them as it saves time for me.
You take care and know we think of you out there someplace ,
Yours Ian

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never un publish
you have delivered
tis the loss of those who do not read
leave it some day twill be brandished like gold
brass, it may have been

I have a copy of all my writing from 1957 to present day, the ones that I take off of Neopoet or any site are stored even before they are initially posted, so not to worry.
It is late again and the dream times gather to embrace my mind and let me journey free.
Talk to you tomorrow night,
Yours as always Ian

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I think it is clever...turn on lights, become de-lighted

this whole little piece worked for me...(do I now have to pay its wages)

words are punny...I mean funny sometimes
twist 'em and shout 'em

Al

Just have to put a shilling in the meter,
It would have been good if I had incorporated the meter into this piece, I could have classed it as poetry lol.
Thanks for your visit,
Yours as always, Ian

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i read this over and over and thought ???
then i read Al’s comment – and the light (light) went on – lol

i think it’s hilarious and very clever...
but how about – for dummies like me – changing the first two lines to
I stared at the blackness
It darkened my thoughts

then we’d have two chances to get the joke....

just a thought
love it now i’ve got it lol

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love judy
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

Have you ever been in complete darkness,
there is nothing to stare at.
That again makes a double statement.
Staring at the darkness
I went into a dark mood.
There was nothing I saw.
It is fearful to go into complete blackness,
eyes that look but cannot see.
Oh I am blessed with eyes that perceive light and darkness, but not absolute blackness,
there perception leaves a fingers touch.
Take care young lady, there is much to write of, on the subject of Nothing,
Yours as always Ian xx

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Darkness is not dark enough
you claim to have served in the Air Force I presume you would have served in darkness and don't
you recall after some time one overcomes night blindness and one can see in to the dark sea as one can during broad day light and otherwise how do you say owls see at night they have no special night vision the darker the night the clearer one sees as you walk ito your bathroom you switch on no lights ere you become blind once again for a while so go back ole veteran and recall there is something known as night vision after all.

I was talking about being deep inside a cave and when all the lights go out the darkness is absolute, My cave only has the light in it to make tea for when you pass by lol,
Take care Young loved, know we know you well,
Yours Ian, and the children..

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i have been 3000 feet below into gold mines
and know what the fux i'm talking Ian
have you ever been 300 yards near a gold mine??
let alone inside one deep 3000 feet u can't imagine the speed down indeed

I lived for 12 years in South Africa, so I have been near around not down but have also flown over the reef there.
In Canada did you know that there is also a reef of gold in or near Timmins however it's spelt, but they wont take the gold out as it would destabilise the gold markets that run the world economy.
In South Africa there are some caves I think they are called the Sadwana caves I have been in them and when you are in there they switch all the lights out so I do know what I am saying:-

The Sudwala Caves in Mpumalanga, South Africa, are set in Precambrian dolomite rock, which was first laid down about 3800 million years ago, when Africa was still part of Gondwana. The caves themselves formed about 240 million years ago.
The caves were used for shelter in prehistoric times, probably due in part to a constant supply of fresh air from an unknown source in the caves.
Look them up on the net it will show you some grand pictures of the place.
By the way my cave is so much better but that is another story, mine was developed in think, and can be what you wish or think to see, so just pop in later and have a perfect cup of tea..
Yours as always Ian.T,
Sadie sends her love to the one that disbelieves in the think xx
I will have to write more about their place for you one day as the nights grow longer..

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:) This one bought a smile to my face! Title "What"! or Watt ( play on words ). I must admit at first I didn't catch on to your charming wit - but all became clear when reading the comments! It's nice to have fun with the English language - and your sense of humour shines through in this clever little write! Te he

Love to you

Mand xxxx

A great thank yew, or is it you, one is used for the making of the long bow, the other is the maker of poetry xx
I am so glad that the light came on after you read this, now you will be able to see all around you lol.
Take care out there and know we think of you, Yours Ian and the Children.xx

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