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Shut Your Mouth Girl

Submitted by Barbara Writes on Sat, 2014-12-06 01:11

I'm on a fiery warpath
I'm done with you talking smack
you think you got me duped,
but your butt’s about to catch a boot.

Take your rug-rats
and pack your bags.
find your own house
before I go in your mouth.

I maybe half blind
and feeling bad half the time,
but, I'll be dang gone dead
before I let you take my head.

Telling your lies to everybody you choose
won’t get me to step back my shoes
nor will I take back the harsh words
I said, you blatant, disrespectful girl.

You’ve managed to unleashed the wrath
I’ve stored up for your dad
every time he pushes me beyond
my breaking point before I'm calmed.

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Rula

Sat, 2014-12-06 06:17

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There is much anger in this from the very beginning, even from the title you can tell about the rage. Sometimes it's good to let it out through words, but don't stay there long.

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Barbara Writes

Sun, 2014-12-07 02:26

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I'm not there. Just wanted to express some crazy emotion in poetry. The good thing about it is I don't do the things I think about doing.
My daughter pull harsh words out with her jealousy. My son think he some counselor and taunted me, (bam harsh words) call me a thug. Then unkind when I try to explain why he, no liscense, can't give keys to car to a designate with a liscense. :-( mama explain, he got it, so mama was kinder saying same thing smh.
I ask him what can I do to change? He told me to go back to my iPad (that is back to the quiet nice parent). Hurting the hubby feeling. Lol. Then after the fiery discussion he ask "I'm a good counselor?" bc he helped me understand how we neglected them". Smh. Hubby answered no, counselors don't talk they listen smh. I'm good, but hubby sugar went up to 399. I try to tell him for 18 yrs. being overthetop nasty mean dad wasn't working. It's why all the kids remember the fights and not the parenting.

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scribbler

Sat, 2014-12-06 10:20

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You must be a small woman because only little women can display such anger . Susan is 5'-2" so I should know lol. I hope this rant has removed a load from you.........stan

Barbara Writes

Sun, 2014-12-07 01:34

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I'm 5'2". Yes I feel much better.

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