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Missing Messiah
If I can be whatever I put my mind to THEN I WANNA BE THE MESSIAH
Mr. Microphone Mcgyver Mr. Survivor Almost died in the clutches of the man that contributed
to my birth within his eyes
I must've looked like the Viet Kong
I'm a child of Vietnam
My Father who art in Heaven
Hollowed it be my name Me and Jesus shared the same first name
His was spelled with I and mine is spelled with an E Easily I open my eyes and watch
Time Fly
The beginning and the ending I'm winning even when I'm sinning
This only the beginings end AMEN
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wesley snow
Fri, 2014-12-05 15:42
Not sure what to say about this.
It's certainly not my sort of poetry, but that's a cop out for not giving the poem its due.
Much of it is confusing to me. I read it several times and pieced together some of it that I had missed, but I am still lost in the end. The language is very angry and if that is the "emotion" you wanted to convey then you succeeded without my having to understand it all.
Does any of this make sense?
I don't like the poem, but I appreciate its emotional power.
W. H. Snow
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Numero Negative...
Fri, 2014-12-05 22:16
Thank You
I feel like it was the best I could do, due to the fact that I am actually in a mental ward in the Baltimore VA. I've been out practice and my poetry is written the way it is because I am also a rap artist.I appreciate your comments deeply and I hope you read more of my work.I only have one fan and would appreciate if you became my second one.I'm looking forward to reading some of your work also.Stay true to yourself always.......
Peace
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