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Showers of Love

Flowers feed on the rain
and I lean on your name
sunshine warm the earth
my heart burning with thirst

Twilight dances with the moon
and I wanna dance with you
rainbows form in my heart
my heart rain from the start

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Thanks Xena, Glad you like it

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if you have a third stanza to share let me see it.

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a very nice comparison of feelings of love with the moods of nature...

warmly..

raj (sublime_ocean)

thanks I like the concept moods of nature

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as usual you are able to get to the heart of the matter in a compact write. And as usual the nitpicker is gonna point out typos lol:
l-1 drop the S in feeds
l-7 drop the S in forms
I'll bet you wish I'd leave your stuff alone.....................scribbler

Never stop being a nitpicker, and nope
I like you nitpicking my stuff

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