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Gone With The Tip of A Knife

Submitted by Barbara Writes on Wed, 2014-11-26 02:10

After being in pain for too long
I can now sing a song
gone with the tip of a knife
I will regain a life
this broken tooth will be gone.

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Rula

Fri, 2014-11-28 08:24

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I am happy you're feeling better.

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Barbara Writes

Sat, 2014-11-29 03:15

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Thanks for the encouragement but I'm not feeling better but have the hope of feeling better bc soon hopefully the two, one broken and other bad root canal, will be removed. Lol. I see Jess's limerick WS paid off hehe.

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weirdelf

Mon, 2014-12-15 11:47

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Great content
Not great limerick form.
Read some more classic limericks and let the form sing in your mind.

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Barbara Writes

Thu, 2014-12-18 00:26

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I shall do

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