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ARTICLE MAZE
flare of albino sun
the cold flask
ablaze
drowsy comes
the glitter
all the brave new
moves
like paper
in the empty falls
like fingerprints
on rain stained halls
how you move me
in the cold
mystery of
enthrall
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Esker
Sun, 2011-01-09 00:33
attraction
at the lights downtown
had to wait
and my mind shifts
I see the sky and its like
bottled with that sun
white behind the clouds
the mists of snow
and the flakes are falling
and Drowsy is the only thing
I could think of
made me yawn
glitter in the light
as they fell so gently
between the buildings
on everything
these cystal flakes
every muse has their look
a pose
and my mind is littered
with imagery like scattered
flyers
the graffiti of passage
dripping with time
storms
touchs
cold mystery
a shiver
something
about it thick
like carnage
beautiful
beckoning
at the precipice
(I dont know if I described
this poem correct or not
now.....Its like the maze
of transit thoughts..)
weirdelf
Sat, 2015-01-10 12:34
and...
the graffiti of passage
flyers
these crystal flakes
and my mind shifts
bottled with that sun
like paper
as they fell so gently
about it thick
storms
and my mind is littered
like carnage
beckoning
every muse has their look
at the precipice
like fingerprints
dripping with time
(I don't know if I described
had to wait
cold mystery
this poem correct or not
now.....It's like the maze
of transit thoughts..)
cheers,
Jess
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Esker
Sat, 2015-01-10 16:32
Your working of this is smooth
I like it a lot Elf!
this is where I can see
the loosening of a lot
keeps still the poem
Thank You for taking the time
All the years now I see
your meaning
I like your reworking!!!
thank you!
weirdelf
Sat, 2015-01-10 18:06
'twas fun
thanks
cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry