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this tree!
We, all trees of life
Plants bear we devour
animals kill and also flower
humans alone eat and devour
each other hour by hour
no one will leave
ere the grave
so to face critique be brave
The sun has never set they say
why then we ourselves
should we betray
we are those trees
which alone seed
the genes have become immortal
notwithstanding which tree
there is no soul
there are no spirits
it's only your attitude still
which does not yet you still!
and so continue to fertilize the soil
why let anyone your seed spoil
toil as you may
some day
will come
when we all will go away
no seed shall ever remain
genes will self sustain
we are the parent tree
live my friend with greater ability
you,each one, are the
TREE
in capitals here
why then have you any fear.
my dear!
Comments
Ian.T
Fri, 2014-11-07 04:41
Loved
A theme that can be expanded your write is long for you, but you held it there in eyes view, a goodly write at that.
The first line needs attention:-
We all trees of life, seems to need the word ARE in there someplace.
Take care, Yours Ian.T
.
There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
lovedly
Fri, 2014-11-07 08:29
Hawks eyes..discernible,,,,,,
an intended comma was missing,,,,,,,
''are'' would make it a statement
many would object
Are we trees?
Ian.T
Fri, 2014-11-07 10:26
Loved
I rest as the correction was a goodly one,
Yours Ian..
.
There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
lovedly
Fri, 2014-11-07 11:28
R U 4 REAL???
u might as well post//.paste
snap when you roamed around
in
LARGE
huggies
the advts GUYS
will pay u handsomely
Have you submitted your limys