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Nature's Delights

A fallen leaf swaying in the wind,
succumbing to its will before bowing to earth,
becoming one with the land
to begin the joy of a lifecycle's rebirth

The foamy waves along the shore
coming and going, forming a pattern of the sea
changing landscapes through time,
displaying their treasures on the beach for you and me

The palm trees waving from a distant,
greeting the visitors, humans and animals
while the birds flying across the heavens
such graceful wind dancers of the world

When grim faces cover the sky
lightning and thunder seems to rage
when they are celebrating life
by offering the water that prolongs age

The at times one can see,
a colourful rainbow after the rain
Such is nature's beauty,
its wonderful delights, unrestrained.

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Each stanza can be made into a poem if you like, but as is the change from one event to the other is not smooth. this reads as a series of Haikus, but I shall wait and see what others and yourself says about the overall poem.
Take care and know we are there with you,
Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

But haiku is in 575 form and none of my stanzas have only 3 lines. Do you think it will be better if I turn this piece into a series of haikus? Mmmm, noy sure how to do that. Any advice/suggeston on how I can make the flow smoother?

Alid

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Each stanza is a piece within its own rights, there's no need to change them but they would each make a separate poem if needed.
No problems, my ref to Haiku's was that nature can be written so.
Not to worry, Yours Ian

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

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