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S U B T L I N A Z U N S H

stripes streak disarray
the suede black shush of sky
sleeps sleek
while ghost trace velvet
falls like down
parapet of heaven sown

beneath the gentle of the
night gapes
shadows
broken
stewn thrown
the rubble stubble
rising through
the softness
pureness
newer
few

like steps
raised weak
upon the calm
like words
drawled new
a landscapes
balm

a worn wind
whirls
closed of the sights
a restless world
alive and bright

delve in above
and crushed below
the fragments
torn
from truths
hard borne

the tender
rumble
of the fight
from distant
years
a searching
sight....

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I found the write to be very chaotic, it lends a distorted feel to the write and can either be received positively by some or negativity, depending upon the poet itself. In my case I liked it very much, the words are at right places and the breaks enclose this write in a long trembling string, very profound and at times melancholic to me, sir.

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[ never fall in love with your imagination,
A face that isn't real.
A seed of your desires and dreams,
A seed that'll never be a tree. ]

A break down of its vibration and frequency
perhaps some would call this a meter and cadence in tech terms
but like all machinery and compliance of operation
a mechanic like a poet would hear
the music of its song
the "sing"
the "Hum"
the "Feel"
under operation

Like arguing the merits of a certian clas
and size of an engine
or any tooled article

but of course the human element
is the creative madness of poets
for some....cooly examing the sense
of nonesense of belonging and
ritual of acceptance and rejection

both elements are strong in this
write
and that Missing Blurry aspect
of the observer and the Observance
Perhaps like the seer and the reflection
in the "mirror"
Like people ..Others taut me this
how to watch people in reflections
a Deflection wave...

deflection is an oblique path
acquiring the beam
like catching or casting dreams

Thank You!

Esker

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