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WHEN DAWN BREAKS

Submitted by Geremia on Thu, 2014-10-09 20:07

WHEN DAWN BREAKS

I sit by my front door
open to the coming morning
and the silence of the dawn
soothes my troubled soul.
I wallow in my own mystery
alone in this semi-darkness
until daylight strikes
to reveal the world that
has isolated me from itself
and all joys of living.

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Editing - rough draft

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raj

Fri, 2014-10-10 00:02

Once again you have created a soul full crystalline poem.

Regards and best wishes,

raj (sublime_ocean)

lovedly

Fri, 2014-10-10 15:43

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but the whole truth
we endeavour to raise your morale
may more such versions of life
immortalize you

wesley snow

Tue, 2014-10-14 16:48

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Between workshops and life it's hard to find the time to just read.
This one is up to your usual standards.

W. H. Snow

A poet is a nightingale, who sits in darkness and sings to cheer its own solitude with sweet sounds. Percy Bysshe Shelley

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Geremia

Wed, 2014-10-15 07:32

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I always appreciated your comments, I understand, I am not much of a comments writer. Difficult to control key board==Parkinson's suddenly "turned on me". But I enjoy NEO so much. The quality of poetry is outstanding....and I read everything.

Mille grazie, Wes

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Ian.T

Wed, 2014-10-15 19:05

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A great piece though sadness seems to rise before the sun.
Hold in there young soul, the dawn will be a beautiful one, Yours, Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

alidzain

Mon, 2014-11-03 10:35

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Good job.

Alid

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