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#079

Submitted by Esker on Wed, 2014-10-08 00:15

blush blue
in all the subtle rush
whom would
stand out

the secret
was that there
was no value

there was no key
in a palm
of eternity

i venture
a density
a value
in meaning
instead

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emeka ozurumba

Thu, 2014-10-09 04:31

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a meaning profound wise one

Esker

Fri, 2014-10-10 18:37

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then I realized that the value is outside..
someone said this to me...
change the outside..
meaning maybe Im locked inside
which is the old biblical parable
about the knocking door thing....

I like the stories and parables
to think about and ponder
because they are widespread enough
in my teaching..learned culture
but there is so much more out there...

Thank You!

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Ian.T

Sat, 2014-10-11 04:45

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Liked this one, and your extra comment gave it perspective..
Then you must stand outside to see your true self,
Not many will tell you what they see and feel.
We in this life are full of shit trying most times to please.
Truth is always hidden by others, it is only you that can see the real you either inside or out.
But not to worry from the things I have read of yours over the years, you are good.
Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

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