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sorry and retort a re-thought!

Fundamentals of life
are just two
for me and you

first

if you are wrong
simply say

sorry!

but if you are dead sure
you are right

fight!

retort
till things you sort...

remember these two
and be happy

let the Lord take care of after life
in which who still believe

you too
okay do!

take care
not to please!
me
loved...

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Lovedly this is the best of yours yet! It's clear, precise, to the point and really good advice!

The only adjustments I would make would be: ( and it is only me )

retort till things are sorted......

let the Lord take care of "the" after life.

of course it's up to you! either way this is the best!

LOve Mand xxxx

howz zat now tis!

when I compose

it's me only
a poet so lonely!

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and direct. Good one.

Alid

thanks

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I have to agree with mand, I like this very much. Friendship poems are my favorite, nice job.

and thank you
you skipped my comment
so I did not again want to lament
you are a fresher here,
i know
but one who will
in leaps and bounds grow.

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