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Little Yellow Leaf

I gazed in amazement, in this same day
As I witnessed something indescribable, by any poet
A single moment, so astonishing, so incredibly real
My heart, thumps furiously at my heaving chest
My heart, has misplaced its breath
Exactly like that feeling you get
When you place your face out the window of a moving vehicle
As you attempt to inhale

Choke

I gulp
I cry
With theses dreary, dreamy, morose eyes, I watched

A single tree
Alarmingly more caring and romantic than the rest
Clinging, clenching
With the strength of a protective mother
To a frail, yet stunning, little yellow leaf
The last among its branches

So afraid to be alone
Cold and bare
Spring, summer, and fall have crept by so swiftly
And ahead lies the winter
A season of death
When only chills grow

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very effective poem,but it seems almost in epistemology

It is. thank you for the kind words.

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