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Yet like a river

you will live on still
cleaning up the sides of the hill
be it so
we all love you
the river must merge with the sea
as it will

but it's a long way yet
the river has to see many a bend
to no end
and
then the sands will reach the shore
later the water will be again made pure

the clouds of happiness will rise again
the cycle will complete
alas not in vain
till then await the next train

be happy till on life's sojourn
you remain
the end may be
not yet
as near as one may fear the pain
we all endure for ever
whilst living till
one is no more
remain silent but not still

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Free verse
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a wonderful piece from the start
you're alright, my dear bard
still i wonder if there's a hidden tale
behind these crafted words you've hailed.
has something happen of late?

Alid

then you will be inspired
by all kinds of poets
who encash upon their souls
to reach their poetic goals
all poets are not like you
who give off personal self

be like me an actor of poetry
and tall tales tell
something worthy of a sell

time alone will yell
a miniature bard was born again
that ONLY Ian can vouch
now may be alid
you may join hands too.
get off your sleeping couch
will you.

this one is on and for you
ask Ian if you really wish to...

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my friend, I do read other's works and i do indulge in some variety myself. I talk about terrorists in "Don't Let Them Win" and the most recent one "I AM ANGRY". I create stories in some of my poems, inspired by Ian's Digit character. I wrote about tragedies and death, inspired by Rula and Jayne.Did one about vampire even.. Now picking up ideas on how to write the piece about Grace, the psychic, one of my characters which is the opposite of Ian's Digit, Carrie's Nevermore and Gee's Killer. Theirs are killers, my characters are law enforcers and hunters of serial killers.

Alid

ur just to great
carry on creativity
is the heart beat
of any poet

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This one is well written and much clearer in its theme, good to read.
Yours Ian.T

.
There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

due you read Geremia

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NO POET OF NEO
HAS time to swim deep into the ocean
to find pearls
maybe this one could have been
So I
am upgrading some of my good unread ones
as I shall cease more posting

my heart sinks so it seems
lovedly

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